Excel - Set aside WON & CASE WON - Excel defeated AGAIN!

milkybk

Fruitcake said:

The link to the document works okay, as do the two videos. 

You have a mixture of defendant and "I" in the first few paragraphs. It doesn't really matter; it would just be a bit neater if it was all the same.

Para 19, it is not an offence. Call it an alleged event instead.
Para 19 also has Beavis incorrectly spelled several times.

Your images don't have date stamps. 

Overall it looks good to me. I think you will be unlucky if you lose.

Hi  @fruitcake thanks for your reply. I will tidy up the first few paragraphs so they’re consistent. I will also add time and date stamps to the images and edit paragraph 19.

Do these need to be from the image meta data itself or can just type a date on the images manually?

I also found a thread from a poster on here who beat excel in the exact same car park, in the exact same conditions - https://forums.moneysavingexpert.com/discussion/5983169/two-separate-claim-forms-for-two-separate-pcns-excel#latest

So going for to review that and see if anything is missing etc.

Le_Kirk

Witness statements are written in first person, "I", "Me" etc.  And it is not just the first few paragraphs!  Paragraph # 19 - It is NOT an offence, rather an "event".

milkybk

Le_Kirk said:

Witness statements are written in first person, "I", "Me" etc.  And it is not just the first few paragraphs!  Paragraph # 19 - It is NOT an offence, rather an "event".

Thanks @Le_Kirk - So I should change all examples of e.g. Defendant to say I/me etc for the WS? So 1st person, rather than 3rd person.

milkybk

All incorrect spellings of "Beavis" have been corrected and Paragraph 19 offence changed to event, as suggested. Thank you.

I will now add time/date stamps to all images etc and make any other changes suggested. I will then repost the 2nd draft.

I will be printing 3 copies of the finalised WS (as advised in this post - link):

1. 1 for the court, in a ring binder with dividers etc, USB of videos attached securely.
2. 1 copy send Royal Mail 1st class with USB to Claimant.
3. 1 copy sent signed and recorded with USD to Claimant.

I will also be emailing electronic copies to the Court and the Claimant too.

milkybk

Ok - So here is V2 of my WS, drop box link: https://www.dropbox.com/s/uhhpu80dulsnuj1/V2 - Redacted - Defendant - Witness Statement.pdf?dl=0

I have changed all spelling mistakes, correct paragraph 19, added date/time stamps to all pictures (can be proven with phone meta data too), updated video link titles to include date and time and have changed all 3rd person references to 1st person (I think I found them all).

Let me know what you all think. 

1505grandad

You will notice that the docs you are exhibiting containing "Judgment" does not include the middle "e" (in this context) that you have stated several times in your WS.

milkybk

1505grandad said:

You will notice that the docs you are exhibiting containing "Judgment" does not include the middle "e" (in this context) that you have stated several times in your WS.

I thought it was spelled in these cases? Is that incorrect? As I have spelled it without the "e" as well or at least I meant too, will change now.

EDIT: Thank you! Yes I had used a mixed of spellings, fixing now. 

Le_Kirk

You still have "offence" in #19 it is an event or incident.

Jenni_D

Why are you "posting" twice to the Claimant? Not sure I'd bother with option 3, as long as you get a certificate of posting for option 2. If in doubt, email a copy to the Claimant('s legal rep).

Note: anything you send to the claimant must be sent to their designated legal - if they are representing themselves then it is the Claimant; if they have a legal company engaged then it goes to the legal co.

milkybk

Le_Kirk said:

You still have "offence" in #19 it is an event or incident.

Apologies, I had changed it on the non-redacted one but not on the redacted version I uploaded for you all to see. I have now made that edit and reuploaded to the original V2 post, with new link etc.