CCJ parking fine support

Coupon-mad

As I was not the driver I am not able to comment on the signage etc.. 

Yes you can and you must, and the reason you know how sparse and full of wordy/small print the signs were, is from the SAR and your local knowledge.

jayM_2

Hi Coupon-mad,
Sorry for delayed response but I have been really unwell for the last few weeks.
I don't know the area as I have never been there before however, I can comment on the wording based on the SAR so I can add to that but it will not be a lot of discussion. Are you able to support me on this as I am struggling a little with what I need to address as part of this defence. 
Where you able to check my dropbox with my draft defence bundle? 
Thanks,
Jay 

nosferatu1001

You are adding a tiny amount of backfground 
You only need to show us the few lines you had changed from the template.

jayM_2

Please find attached my redacted draft copy of the skeleton argument as suggested by Coupon-mad.
I still need to think about the signage argument, but any pointers would be great - Thank you.  
Some notes to follow when reading the redacted skeleton argument below: 

• Text in yellow is for me to finalise prior to issuance. 
• Text in green could do with some pointers. There are two areas, and you can see point (d) contradicts the paragraph above, but I am unsure which way to tackle the "defence".
• Text in cyan / crossed out is the changes from the defence template to create the skeleton argument as you suggested. 
• Please check sections 1, 2 and 3. All other text which is not highlighted is as per the template therefore, no need to check it. 

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nosferatu1001

a skeleton should be a page or two of bullets, in my opinion. Not dense meat, just the bones. 

Coupon-mad

Yes I think chop it to bullet points and remove defence points like denials.

jayM_2

Thank you for your input. I have changed section 2 and 3 into shorter bullet points, see the revised wording below. 

Do I keep the rest of the sections in the defence template as part of my skeleton argument or do I removed them? The suggestion before was to remove the statement of truth/signature and references to it being a 'defence' (and remove the start where it says 'it is admitted that/it is denied that'). 
I have just amended section 2&3 from above and the rest is as part my post on 2nd Feb. any advice would be much appreciated. 
Thank you!

Coupon-mad

The suggestion before was to remove the statement of truth/signature and references to it being a 'defence' (and remove the start where it says 'it is admitted that/it is denied that'). 

You must do that.  This currently does NOT read like a skelly.

nosferatu1001

It's a skeleton. It's a short summary of your key arguments and a debunk of theirs. 

jayM_2

Thanks both. I am trying to find an example skeleton on this forum as I am struggling to shorten it beyond two pages. Are you aware of any examples to support me on this please?