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Milliered

Okay,here's another go.

Have put my wording over two paragraphs 3 and 4 and then renumbered to 10 as suits or remove 10 if needed.

3. Reference to Particulars of Claim, paragraph (1) is denied. The Defendant is not indebted to the Claimant. Paragraph (2) is denied. The Defendant does not accept that a contravention occurred 30th August 2025 as alleged.

Paragraphs (3 and 4) are also denied as there was no breach of the terms on the signs( the contract) therefore, there was no Unauthorised Vehicle .

4. The Defendant disputes that the vehicle was even parked within the car park boundary and did not even enter or exit the car park. Therefore, a contract could not possibly have been entered and agreed or indeed even broken.

The vehicle was parked for a total of less than ten minutes on the side within the junction off the main rd that then enters into the car park once clear of the junction approx another 20 feet. The Defendant never went past the first sign which is located high up on the side of the residential building. On further inspection, there is another sign further into the car park that was obscured by a white van, which is shown in the photos taken by the attendant who had been hidden in his car to operate covertly..

Rest to follow as template. Renumbered as needed. I assume this is going to look long winded so really need some advice please as to what to do as short on time.

Many thanks

Milliered

Having just re read para 2 and 4 on the template defence, they seem to be at odds with what I have written myself in my paragraph. Would you agree?

Obviously I want to use the template defence in whole so please advice what to do as struggling. Have to fit in around work and has to be submitted tomorrow.

TThanks

Gr1pr

A defence is written in the 3rd person

Milliered

TThanks for your reply

I have changed the comments of ' I' to 'the Defendant ' to rectify the couple of errors if that's what you meant? I have also rejigged a couple of the lines that were repeated

Is it all about right or still way off ? Would very much appreciate some guidance as to where I am with it please.

Milliered

Hi all.

Would appreciate it if someone could look over my new draft please before I submit it shortly.

Many thanks

Coupon-mad

carpark is incorrect, it's 2 words: car park

Otherwise, I'd remove this unnecessary narrative and keep it for WS stage later:

"When the Defendant questioned him about the carpark boundary, he didn't know and just waved his hand across the front of the vehicle to indicate an imaginary boundary line.

Photos that the Defendant took myself at the alleged breach prove the distance between the vehicle and the carpark, also the distance to the first sign that indicates the carpark boundary."

Milliered

Hi Coupon-mad

Thank you for your reply.

Have altered my draft again .

Would it be worth putting it in just as number 3 rather than split over numbers 3 and 4 or is it too much wording for one paragraph.

Would you be kind enough to have a look over it again for me to see if all ok and then I can get submitted today?

Many thanks

Le_Kirk

3. Reference With reference to Particulars of Claim, paragraph (1) is denied. The Defendant is not indebted to the Claimant. Paragraph (2) is denied. The Defendant does not accept that a contravention occurred 30th August 2025 as alleged. Paragraphs (3 and 4) are also denied as there was no breach of the terms on the signs( the contract) therefore, there was no Unauthorised Vehicle .

4. The Defendant disputes that the vehicle was even parked within the car park boundary and did not even enter or exit the car park. Therefore, a contract could not possibly have been entered and agreed or indeed even broken. The vehicle was parked for a total of less than ten minutes on the side within the junction off the main rd that then enters into the car park once clear of the junction approx another 20 feet. The Defendant never went past the first sign which is located high up on the side of the residential building. On further inspection, there is another sign further into the car park that was obscured by a white van, which is shown in the photos taken by the attendant who had been hidden in his car to operate covertly..

Change your #3 as shown. Every paragraph requires a number so adjust as above.

Milliered

HI Le_Kirk

Thanks for the reply.

So when i rectify the couple of grammar issues and number as you advise, it will be good to go with then?

Many thanks

Gr1pr

IMHO, yes, do those few corrections, copy, paste, save, submit