Court defence

Umkomaas

' .... and could not possibly have been the driver'

Redx

After question write

But not the driver , or adapt it a to what Umkomaas wrote

So was actually in bed at

Add in that actually word

Then it seem correct to me as your paragraph 2

The point being

Not the driver

Actually in bed

No liability , hence the denial. , I never mentioned removing items from the fruitcake example , so stop removing things. It's all about better wording

kfrs9960

Redx said:

After question write

But not the driver , or adapt it a to what Umkomaas wrote

So was actually in bed at

Add in that actually word

Then it seem correct to me as your paragraph 2

The point being

Not the driver

Actually in bed

No liability , hence the denial. , I be Dr nentioned removing items from the fruitcake example , so stop removing things. It's all about better wording

a)    It is admitted that the Defendant was the registered keeper of the vehicle in question and because they were working night shifts they were actually in bed at the time of the alleged incident. and could not possibly have been the driver Liability is denied. 

b)   It is admitted that the Defendant was the registered keeper of the vehicle in question and they were working night shifts, so were actually in bed at the time of the alleged incident. and could not possibly have been the driver Liability is denied. 

Which one sounds better, my grammar  isn't the best

Redx

The second one

So post your proposed and numbered paragraphs 2 and 3 , plus any additions as say 4 & 5 etc , below

You can renumber top to bottom when the final agreed paragraphs are slotted into the rest of the template

KeithP

Or c)...
It is admitted that the Defendant was the registered keeper of the vehicle in question but was not the driver. The Defendant was working night shifts and was sleeping at home at the time of the alleged parking event. Liability is therefore denied.

Redx

Liability must be denied , so not that one

kfrs9960

Redx said:

The second one

So post your proposed and numbered paragraphs 2 and 3 , plus any additions as say 4 & 5 etc , below

You can renumber top to bottom when the final agreed paragraphs are slotted into the rest of the template

The facts as known to the Defendant:

2.        It is admitted that the Defendant was the registered keeper of the vehicle in question and they were working night shifts. So were actually in bed at the time of the alleged incident and could not possibly have been the driver Liability is denied.

3,      The Notice to Keeper from the Claimant fails to comply with the strict requirements of the Protection of Freedoms Act 2012 (“The Act”), Schedule 4, including paragraph 9 (2) (f) and therefore the Claimant is incapable of holding the keeper liable. The Defendant denies that the vehicle keeper is obliged to name the driver to a private parking firm. Had this been the intention of parliament, they would have been made such requirement part of The Act.

KeithP

Had this been the intention of parliament, they would have been made such requirement part of The Act.

The second 'been' should not be there.

kfrs9960

Is This now good enough to submit ?

Fruitcake

Show us both the paragraphs you have altered please (and any additional changes to the template if you have made them).