Parking eye appeal 3 days left

kryten3000

It's still too long and the "consideration period" is 5 minutes, not 10. 

Signage,  CRA and Landowner authority are already covered in other paragraphs, you don't need the detail at this stage.

There is a phrase about not having derived any benefit from the car park which I can't find the exact words for, perhaps someone can help me out - it's usually for airport drop-off zones where the driver simply passed through the area without stopping.  I would add that, but nothing else to what I suggested.

Vagatha1

Ok thanks, I did see a bit about that so I'll look again and make it shorter. Thank you!

Vagatha1

is this ok...

3. Upon entering the site, the Defendant attempted multiple times to pay via the online address displayed on the signage; however, on each attempt, the system returned a message stating “payment not accepted at this time” (screenshot provided). Believing this might be a temporary error, the Defendant retried several times before telephoning the payment line listed on the signage, but the automated system stated that the location was “unknown” (call record attached). Believing the car park to be associated with the church, and that payment might be possible inside, the Defendant walked to the church to enquire but found it closed. Realising payment could not be made, the Defendant left promptly. The total duration on site was approximately 10 minutes, including the time spent attempting to pay and checking the signage. The Defendant derived no benefit from the car park and did not park or accept any contractual terms. Under the British Parking Association Code of Practice (BPA CoP, para 13.1), operators must allow a reasonable consideration period for drivers to read the terms, attempt payment, and decide whether to stay or leave. The Defendant’s actions were within this reasonable period, and therefore no contravention occurred.

Le_Kirk

That looks good.  No evidence goes with a defence so change comments to screenshots/call record will be provided with the witness statement.

1505grandad

" Under the British Parking Association Code of Practice (BPA CoP, para 13.1),....."

A heads-up  -  you should be using/quoting the latest unregulated "joint" single ppssCoP:-

https://www.britishparking.co.uk/write/Documents/AOS/Sector Code Templates/sectorsingleCodeofPracticeVersion1.1130225.pdf

Vagatha1

Thank you! I changed it to say para 5.1. I have sent off the defense! thank you guys

1505grandad

"I have sent off the defense! (Defence) thank you guys"

Suggestion  -  make sure your devices are set to English (UK)  -  it has been known that American spelling may annoy some Judges.

Vagatha1

1505grandad said:

"I have sent off the defense! (Defence) thank you guys"

Suggestion  -  make sure your devices are set to English (UK)  -  it has been known that American spelling may annoy some Judges.

Oh my gosh really!! How embarrassing on my partner haha, I hope there wasn't anything American in that defence! It's sent now haha. Thanks for the heads up!