Smart Parking/DCBL claim Form insufficient paid time

Gr1pr

A defence is written in the 3rd person,  so some sections need changing,  here is one example,  I had my son with me 

Frankly,  that fact seems irrelevant to me,  perhaps remove the sentence  ? Save it for the future WS

Also, paragraph 2 states little recollection,  yet subsequent paragraphs are very detailed,  both cannot be true 

Check if it fits into the 122 lines on MCOL too

Your defence deadline is tomorrow,  by 4pm on Monday 22nd September 

Marcus12b

Thanks

I removed the line above and you right paragraph 2 and then following do contradict so I'm going to remove the end of para 2 because I do remember much of what happened parking there.

It all fits, 11 lines remaining.