Defence Letter (DCB Legal) - could somebody check my wording please?

aj54

Hi, could I get somebody to check the wording for paras 3 - 5 of my defence please? (Template from the sticky thread)

Basically, the driver (my wife) paid for parking at a Premier Inn, run by Parkmaven, along with my sister-in-law. They both received a PCN - sister-in-law had hers cancelled withe the reason from Parkmaven (technical error).

We have signed and stamped bank statements to prove payment was made, as well as a copy of the letter sent to my sister-in-law, with Parkmaven admitting fault.

Is that enough? Do I need to add anything else?

3. The driver of the vehicle (the defendant’s then-fiancée, now wife) parked at Perrycroft Road (Premier Inn Haywards Heath) and stayed the night in Premiere Inn. The driver paid the parking fee and has bank statements to prove this (stamped and signed by her bank). 

 

4. The driver was accompanied by the defendant's sister-in-law, who also paid for parking for a separate vehicle minutes later than the driver. The defendant's sister-in-law also received a Parking Charge Notice, which was cancelled by the Claimant. The reason for this, in the Claimant’s own words, was ‘a technical error which meant [your] vehicle registration was not sent through from the booking platform (YourParkingSpace) to our PCN processing system.’ 

 

5. The defendant has told the claimant that payment for parking had been made on the day of parking, and proof of payment has been sent to the claimant. On 27th September 2023, the claimant sent the defendant a message through its support system stating ‘this ticket has been cancelled. For clarity, no further action is required.’ 

Thanks!

1505grandad

Is this to do with your existing thread here:-
https://forums.moneysavingexpert.com/discussion/6473598/im-an-idiot-i-called-the-debt-collector/p1

If so please continue on the above thread.

aj54

1505grandad said:

Is this to do with your existing thread here:-
https://forums.moneysavingexpert.com/discussion/6473598/im-an-idiot-i-called-the-debt-collector/p1

If so please continue on the above thread.

Will do - thanks