Letter Review Help! :question:

ceetp

Hi everyone.
Could somebody please take a look at the letter I have drafted to send to MET and tell me if it is ok or if I have missed anything important.
I am at the Gladstones solicitor stage (after previously receiving letters from Roxburghe aswell). I have sent off Daisy's letter to Gladstones, and I have also emailed my property management company who say they will "look into it" if the response for my below letter is not in my favour.

Anyway....
Here is my letter I intend to send to MET:

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I refer to the parking charge of 13/06/2013
Parking Charge Number: MPXXXXXX

Please note, this is an open letter and I reserve the right to produce it to the court at the appropriate time, should the need arise.

Firstly, I do not accept liability for the above parking charge and I have no intention of paying the money demanded. Specifically, I do not accept that the charge is in any way shape or form a genuine pre-estimate of loss, especially as the parking space is in fact my own allocated space. I possess a permit for this space, and was told I needed to collect a renewed permit from the on-site concierge. The concierge is open during daytime office hours, meaning it is closed before I leave for work, and is also closed upon my return. I work long hours on a shift basis with no specific days off, but at my first available opportunity I went and collected the permit. Upon returning to my car I was enraged to discover I had been issued a parking charge. My new permit was displayed immediately.
I do not believe that you have legal standing to pursue an action against me, since any loss (which is strongly denied) would be the landholder’s in any event. As a private parking enforcement company, I would like to assume that you have no proprietary interest in imposing parking charges and persecuting residents and instead are hired to prevent abusive parking from non-residents. For the above reasons, any court proceedings in connection with this matter will be vigorously defended.

I invite you to cancel this charge, or indeed refer this dispute to the Parking On Private Land appeals service (“POPLA”), which is the appropriate form set up by the parking industry for this precise situation. There are, as you probably know, no deadlines in which to appeal to POPLA. All that is required is for you to issue a POPLA code.
Should it be your intention to start court proceedings, you must first provide a Letter Before Claim. I have not yet received a letter that meets those requirements.

Please Note: Notwithstanding the fact that any decision of POPLA is legally binding on the parking company, and not the motorist, in the spirit of exploring an amicable resolution of this dispute, I am willing to give an undertaking to be bound by the decision of POPLA, thus ensuring that this case will not proceed to court.

I suggest that you consider my case and contact me with a decision, or albeit to issue a compliant Letter Before Claim.

Yours Faithfully,
XXXX XXXXXX.
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As always, thank you for any help and replies.