Does this cover letter sound ok?

littleminx_2

Hi all

Just wonderng if anyone can give me an opinion on how this cover letter sounds, it's been quite a while since i have had to write one!

I am most keen to be considered for position of Travel Money Sales Advisor as advertised on the jobseekers website.

Having over 15 years customer service and sales experience i feel I have the necessary attributes in order for me to become a valued and productive member of your team. I have worked as a travel advisor with two of the UK’S leading tour operators, selling holidays, car hire, insurance and travel money, using their in house systems.
I am very enthusiastic and passionate about my customer service and always strive to exceed customer expectations.

Please find my CV attached for your reference.

I would like to thank you for your consideration of my application.


Yours Sincerely

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Many thanks in advance for all you opinions.

McKneff

:DSounds good to me, I'd give you the job.:p

littleminx_2

Many thanks McKneff, really appreciated.

That has given my confidence a much needed boost, i shall now get to work on improving my CV, have never had any replies from employers lately, so maybe it's this that is letting me down.

Man thanks

McKneff

You're welcome LM

only 3 little things, i dont like the 'most' keen, i like just keen but that is personal choice.

jobseekers should be jobseeker's, no offence, just trying to help

'customer service' say customer service skills.

Good luck and let us know how you get on..............

Xena_007

Yea it's good the last sentence where it says I am very enthusiastic and passionate about my customer service.... Follow on from this and say something like....... This has been demonstrating when taking time out to organise a customer focus day over the weekend..... Blag it but give an example of how you've demonstrating your passion and enthusiasm.

Just to re-itterate this is a good cover letter!

Xena_007

After winning x factor I didn't think you would need to write cover letters n e more lol

teajug

Hope you do not mind perhaps would this read better, but your one is great. Best of Luck


Dear Sir/Madam

Your advert on the jobseekers website for a Sale Advisor was of great interest to me.

Having over 15 years customer service and sales experience I feel that I can be of great assistance to your company.

I have the necessary attributes in order for me to become a valued and productive member of your team, having worked as a travel advisor with two of the UK’S leading tour operators, selling holidays, car hire, insurance and travel money, using their in house systems.

I am very enthusiastic and passionate and care about my customer service and always strive to exceed customer expectations.

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need to discuss further my my experience in Customer Skills.

Please find my CV attached for your kind attention.

Yours sincerely

littleminx_2

Thanks,

McKneff, no offence taken whatsoever, i am very greatful for any advice you can give, i have been out of work for over 3 years so need as much help as i can get.

Xena, really good ideas, thank you.

teajug, wow what a great cover letter, so much better than mine!


At the moment i am a student at my local college doing my Support Teaching and Learning level 2, and planning to do level 3, so i need to do some part time work to keep the bills paid lol.


Thank you all so much, am just in the middle of tidying up my CV, as i think this is where i may be going soooo wrong. :beer:

Amanita_2

"Sincerely" shouldn't have a capital letter - sorry pedantic I know.

littleminx_2

Thanks Amanita,

Didn't notice that!

teajug

littleminx wrote: »

Thanks,

At the moment i am a student at my local college doing my Support Teaching and Learning level 2, and planning to do level 3, so i need to do some part time work to keep the bills paid lol.

Thank you all so much, am just in the middle of tidying up my CV, as i think this is where i may be going soooo wrong. :beer:

When I was young many moon ago and as far as I can remember this is how we started off our CV's

By saying that you are a conscientious person and still studying etc.

Then your qualification in chronological order

You follow that with your working experience in the same order.

Not sure if that is correct now but just a few suggestions.

I am sure someone else will give you some good pointers soon.

Let us know how you are doing with it.