opinions please

sunrise27_2

opinions please , a lady came into work the other day asking if we sold pretty writing paper ( unfortunately we don't ) and she couldn't find any in the shops , it got me thinking that maybe this was an avenue that we could look at. This is my first attempt at a young boys writing set - I would really appreciate your opinion - it could be used for thank you letters after birthdays, christmas etc , I thought the football design might appeal to the young males

botanical

sunrise27 wrote: »

opinions please , a lady came into work the other day asking if we sold pretty writing paper ( unfortunately we don't ) and she couldn't find any in the shops , it got me thinking that maybe this was an avenue that we could look at. This is my first attempt at a young boys writing set - I would really appreciate your opinion - it could be used for thank you letters after birthdays, christmas etc , I thought the football design might appeal to the young males

I think the idea's a good one.
Is the set enclosed in the black folder thing? it looks slightly old fashioned.
Could you make the cover look more like a computer, grey with a logo of some sort.
Little boys need to look cool too.
The grey/black ink looks a little amateurish, or is this the idea before printing?

I feel that putting the images down the side is somehow random-looking and not
quite so appealing and might be better at the top with a stripey dividing line under it.
Plain envelopes? There's not enough in the package to appeal.
Pre-headed invites, thank you's etc may appeal.

Sorry for the candour, just my opinion. I'm an artist and designer.

sunrise27_2

thank you for your views
I have these ideas and go off on a tangent so its always nice to get feedback from a neutral person
will make some adjustments and post some more photos x x

botanical

sunrise27 wrote: »

thank you for your views
I have these ideas and go off on a tangent so its always nice to get feedback from a neutral person
will make some adjustments and post some more photos x x

look forward to seeing them!

themull1

Sorry, no. No offence, but a young boy could probably do better... sorry.

LJM

I think it is a great idea to work on you could make them up to each Childs likes

sunrise27_2

thank you , to be honest this was just a quick make up one to get the idea 'out there' and ask peoples opinions.
I already have one customer interested in them for her two children and another lady contacted me and asked if I could make notelets rather than writing paper and she has ordered 10 notelets so happy days x

LJM

That's good then looking forward to seeing some finished orders