Poems

ELLA

I'm trying to write a poem for my hubby for v day! He wrote me one years ago and it was the best present He has ever given me. I want to shock him and give him a well written poem, problem is I'm rubbish at this sort of thing..........

This is a very rough start

I met you all those years ago when you were just a boy,
A few years past and at long last I must have caught your eye!

You made me laugh you made me cry when you I knew you could never be mine!
Aol and hotmail seemed to draw us nearer until one day we could finally say "At last we can be together"

We met at work when he is younger than me, after spending huge amounts of time on the computer and meeting in secret we finally got together 6 years ago, we married and have two gorgeous children. I was married before hence why we couldn't be together for sometime until I had made the right choice.

It's hard trying to find the right words
I need a bot of poem advice please:D

JailhouseBabe

Ella - as long as it comes form the heart I'm sure your OH will love it even if it's not perfect!

A starting point from me when I'm trying to come up wth a poem that I want to rhyme is to think of the main points I want to make then try to think of rhyming words or alternatives that have rhyming words IYKWIM. As an example, you've got the word 'together', so an obvious rhyming word would be 'forever'. Another example, 'always' might be hard to find something to rhyme with, so an alternative could be 'for all time'.

HTH x

U've_been_framed

Try changing a few words or moving them around: for example, I cannot think of a rhyme for boy but if you change it to 'youth' it rhymes with truth.
Also, you could change the last part to 'We can be together at last' and maybe match it with 'past' or 'vast'

Alternatively, could you find a poem and just alter small details to make it more personal? I must admit that I once tried to improve Robert Burns and failed miserably.

Good luck.

ELLA

Many thanks, Ive a feeling this is going to be far harder than I thought!!!

moosetastic

hi ella, i think what you have done so far is great. Poems dont always have to rhyme, so long as what you say is from your heart then it will be fab.

I wrote lots of poems for my hubby when we got together, one was read out at my wedding and made everyone cry! bless! LOL :rotfl:

one idea you could use is i wrote lots of poems, some serious, some funny, and i put them in a nice little book with doodles and sayings, all for him. he says its the best present i have ever given him.

if you want some inspiration ill write a few of mine here if you want

ELLA

moosetastic that would be great, it's suddenly hit me that we are all ready in Feb and Ive struggling to do this for two weeks. I go blank when I start to write!

moosetastic

ok, here are a few of mine, feel free to use bits etc

I want to be the only one for you,
The one you tell your secrets to,
The quiet voice when everything is loud,
I want to be the face you look for in a crowd,
I want to be the shoulder you cry upon,
The one to say I'll never be gone,
I want to be the one you put your arms around,
The one who can speak without making a sound,
I want to feel your dreams and fears,
And wipe away your lonely tears,
I want to be the one to fill your night,
To hold you close, to feel so right,
That place is waiting there for me,
That's the place I want to be,
I want to make you happy, make you see,
Theres no-one else for you but me.

I love you, have done right from the start,
Your gentleness and sincerity really touched my heart,
I love you, never doubted my feelings inside,
Fought long and hard to be with you, falling tears and wounded pride,
I love you, happiness and joy, overflowing rapture,
Said the right words and my heart you did capture,
I love you, little things you do and say,
Sweetness in your smile, eyes sparkling to show the way,
I love you, every star in my sky twinkles for you,
Every bird sings sweeter, colours are more vivid too,
I love you, so very much, my life is now so clear,
and I will move mountains, cross deserts and oceans to be held in your arms so dear,
I love you, said on our wedding day,
With our hands resting on our hearts,
And our life began on that day, and we will never be apart.

There is a little word I know,
It flows off the tongue with great ease,
Makes me feel warm when I say it,
Makes me feel happy when I hear it,
So proud to know this little word,
My life enriched by the joy that it brings,
What is this little word, of which am I so fond?
The word is Dave, my whole world in four letters

I could journey a thousand miles,
O'er land and sea for one of your smiles,
Through raging storms and starlit skies,
I'd fly all night to look into your eyes,
Climb mountains high, swim rivers wide,
Move heaven and earth to be by your side,
Cross darkest woods and valleys with fear,
I would run to your side to catch a falling tear,
Walk sandy beaches, on the dust of the moon,
To avoid leaving you a little too soon,
Apart and away from you and your kiss,
I would journey forever, for you, the one that I miss.

All the ones above are mine, and here are some other little snippets which I found online to fill my hubby's book.

Life is for living, I live mine for you
Love is for giving, I give mine to you
Hearts are for beating, mine beats for you
Dreams are full of meaning, mine are full of you

If such a heart was as sweet as yours,
It could only belong to an angel,
If there was a star that shone at night,
It would shine on use ever so bright,
And if ever the time we see the light
It'll be worth the wait to be with the angel of the night
Thats you my love, The angel that be,
The sweetest angel to come unto me

When we are together and when we are apart,
You are always in my mind and always in my heart

To live this life I need a heartbeat
To have a heartbeat I need a heart
To have a heart I need happiness
To have happiness I need you

Even though Ive heard that love is always true
I never would've believed it if it hadn't been for you

Hope these give you some inspiration, and good luck!

ELLA

Well there is plenty to read and lot's of inspiration, your poems are lovely and well done - your hubby is a lucky man :-)

I_am_mad

moosetastic that first poem is absolutley lovely it made me cry it is so thoughtful i wish i could write something like that! well done on writing such gorgeous poems :j

moosetastic

thanks Ella and I am mad for your kind words, its nearly seven years ago since I wrote them, in the throws of new love etc lol :rotfl: six years and we are still together, and just as mad about each other. So much so, HE is cooking me valentines dinner next week!! I cant wait!!

ELLA

Yep same here, my hubby has never cooked a meal in his life but has decided to cook this year.........that's if he doesn't pass out at the poem I intend to give him ;-)